by Little Sally » Fri Jun 03, 2022 9:54 pm
CKent45 wrote: ↑Fri Jun 03, 2022 8:35 pm
I wrote that description more to gauge response to the description. The complaint was for more detail, which is actually in line with comments I provided to her privately, however reading the feedback in this thread left me wondering about their feedback vs. mine. Hopefully what I did, and what you just confirmed, was provide a simple demonstration of description of an event without even going too far into detail about size comparisons.
What I can say about Tina's work is that she is very good at describing things, I only provided feedback on specific areas where I would have personally liked more detail. But I also let her know that in the short story I was writing her about she provided a good deal of detail on the foreplay leading up to an intimate moment, describing carefully how a doll sized woman was slowly and sensually undressed in a manner that you wouldn't expect with someone miniaturized. Those descriptions were quite fun and interesting to read, I simply wanted that level of description as their intimacy moved to the next stage.
Now, here's the other issue when it comes to detail that I'm sure Tina has been weighing carefully: we're talking about short stories here. There is only so much that you can put into a short story before it isn't a short story any longer. Her stories, from I've read so far, seem to have good pacing and flow, which excessive detail can disrupt, especially in a short story. If the line I provided above is a half way decent example of a quick description of carefully lifting up a shrunken woman, then I think it's safe to say from what I've read this is a skill Tina's mastered probably better than I have. It's more a question of placement of said details, and importance in the story. She put herself out there by asking for this feedback and I can tell you that it's really hard to get that feedback in writing, even when you ask for it and when it does come in, it's really hard to take in stride. While I agree with wanting more details, it's important to provide her with specifics in as good of detail as we can rather than just comments of "I want more detail." You might not have read her works, but you gave me something very specific to latch on to so that I could test my theory, which was invaluable. Plus, it helps me practice on my own providing of details.
Well first off I think it's good you've gotten the thread back on topic, and nice that you've been in touch with Tina to share ideas and offer advice. Writing is such a personal thing to embark on it can be a lonely journey, so getting some feedback at least tells you you've made a connection with somebody. And I found myself nodding along to most of what you said above, and well said it was too.
Personally, I'd never welcome the sort of feedback that's in the form of a critique, because I'm my own best (or indeed worst) critic. If I haven't satisfied myself with what what I've written after painfully pouring over it for days and sometimes weeks, then I consider it done and indeed the best I could have done. Whether it works for someone else or not becomes secondary because I write to express my own peculiar fantasies first and foremost, and at the end of it all I usually feel thoroughly entertained, on a personal level at least.
But when sometimes I get some very positive feedback, it feels uplifting to know that you've resonated with someone. I'm sure most writers get that sort of buzz too, so I don't consider myself unique in any way.
I feel I could go on at length here, but it's a complex subject and I'm conscious of hogging someone else's topic.
CKent45 wrote: ↑Fri Jun 03, 2022 1:44 pm
As you wish. We shall simply ignore the redness of your skin at the edges of your sleeves. I'd assumed it was a rash from the abrasiveness of your improperly shrunken garments, but maybe under your clothes you're just several shades redder than outside of them.
Oh no sir.. as YOU wish!
I can recognise your "out of clothes" preferences blindfolded, and who am I to pour cold water over them.
Enjoy them at your leisure and pleasure, but it won't be me you'll be finding under that odd looking pile of clothing, lol!
CKent45 wrote: ↑Fri Jun 03, 2022 1:44 pm
Also, I think Amazon books do text to speech, so I'm sure you can listen to Tina's books if that works better for you.
That's something I may have to investigate, so thank you for the heads up.
[quote=CKent45 post_id=22837 time=1654288529 user_id=65]
I wrote that description more to gauge response to the description. The complaint was for more detail, which is actually in line with comments I provided to her privately, however reading the feedback in this thread left me wondering about their feedback vs. mine. Hopefully what I did, and what you just confirmed, was provide a simple demonstration of description of an event without even going too far into detail about size comparisons.
What I can say about Tina's work is that she is very good at describing things, I only provided feedback on specific areas where I would have personally liked more detail. But I also let her know that in the short story I was writing her about she provided a good deal of detail on the foreplay leading up to an intimate moment, describing carefully how a doll sized woman was slowly and sensually undressed in a manner that you wouldn't expect with someone miniaturized. Those descriptions were quite fun and interesting to read, I simply wanted that level of description as their intimacy moved to the next stage.
Now, here's the other issue when it comes to detail that I'm sure Tina has been weighing carefully: we're talking about short stories here. There is only so much that you can put into a short story before it isn't a short story any longer. Her stories, from I've read so far, seem to have good pacing and flow, which excessive detail can disrupt, especially in a short story. If the line I provided above is a half way decent example of a quick description of carefully lifting up a shrunken woman, then I think it's safe to say from what I've read this is a skill Tina's mastered probably better than I have. It's more a question of placement of said details, and importance in the story. She put herself out there by asking for this feedback and I can tell you that it's really hard to get that feedback in writing, even when you ask for it and when it does come in, it's really hard to take in stride. While I agree with wanting more details, it's important to provide her with specifics in as good of detail as we can rather than just comments of "I want more detail." You might not have read her works, but you gave me something very specific to latch on to so that I could test my theory, which was invaluable. Plus, it helps me practice on my own providing of details. ;) [/quote]
Well first off I think it's good you've gotten the thread back on topic, and nice that you've been in touch with Tina to share ideas and offer advice. Writing is such a personal thing to embark on it can be a lonely journey, so getting some feedback at least tells you you've made a connection with somebody. And I found myself nodding along to most of what you said above, and well said it was too.
Personally, I'd never welcome the sort of feedback that's in the form of a critique, because I'm my own best (or indeed worst) critic. If I haven't satisfied myself with what what I've written after painfully pouring over it for days and sometimes weeks, then I consider it done and indeed the best I could have done. Whether it works for someone else or not becomes secondary because I write to express my own peculiar fantasies first and foremost, and at the end of it all I usually feel thoroughly entertained, on a personal level at least. :D But when sometimes I get some very positive feedback, it feels uplifting to know that you've resonated with someone. I'm sure most writers get that sort of buzz too, so I don't consider myself unique in any way.
I feel I could go on at length here, but it's a complex subject and I'm conscious of hogging someone else's topic.
[quote=CKent45 post_id=22835 time=1654263882 user_id=65]
As you wish. We shall simply ignore the redness of your skin at the edges of your sleeves. I'd assumed it was a rash from the abrasiveness of your improperly shrunken garments, but maybe under your clothes you're just several shades redder than outside of them. ;)[/quote]
Oh no sir.. as YOU wish! :D I can recognise your "out of clothes" preferences blindfolded, and who am I to pour cold water over them.
Enjoy them at your leisure and pleasure, but it won't be me you'll be finding under that odd looking pile of clothing, lol!
[quote=CKent45 post_id=22835 time=1654263882 user_id=65]Also, I think Amazon books do text to speech, so I'm sure you can listen to Tina's books if that works better for you.
[/quote]
That's something I may have to investigate, so thank you for the heads up.